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Subject: [kde-promo] Re: Second version of the booklet
From: Vivek Prakash <vivek.ap () gmail ! com>
Date: 2011-01-24 4:03:32
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Part two of my corrections follows:
On Sun, Jan 23, 2011 at 1:14 PM, Vivek Prakash <vivek.ap@gmail.com> wrote:
> Hi,
>
> Here's a list of minor corrections I've identified. I'll keep reading
> through and provide more comments as I get the time, but I know you're up
> against a deadline.
>
> Vivek
>
>
> Page 2: inset - TODO before printing / finalizing:
> 1. remove "YOUR NAME" (maybe replace with "and others")
> 2. Add credits for graphics, currently has no names.
>
> Page 3: Improper quotes around "Quick Tweet":
> >KDE micro-blogging application. It has a simple
> >„Quick Tweet"; with it, a click of a button is all you
>
> Page 4: wording when talking about Blogilo: suggest replacing "top" with
> "best"
> >The top is that it handles multiple blogs
>
> Page 4: mention Emails for Kontact introduction:
> >Manage your life with Kontact. Keep track of your
> > appointments, deadlines and vacations, manage
> Suggestion (change in *bold*): *Read your emails, keep* track of your
> appointments, [...]
>
> Page 4: inset - Improper quotes around "start" and "All":
> >super key often has the
> > ‚start‘ text on it, or a
> and
> > ticking the „All" check box.
>
> Page 4: inset re: Kontact components: fix punctuation: replace . with , at
> end of first sentence.
> Currently:
> Although you can
> open the Kontact
> components separa-
> tely, e.g. for Mail, Ca-
> lendar or Contacts.
> They are tailored to
> work well with each
> other within Kontact.
>
> Suggestion (change in *bold*): Although [...] or Contacts*, they* [...].
>
>
> Page 5: Improper quotes on Let's and Kontact's:
> > Let‘s take a look at some of them!
>
> > Kontact‘s email component
>
> > Kontact‘s Calendar
>
> Page 6: quotes on 'torrent':
> > It is easy to create a ‚torrent‘ to
>
> Page 6: inset - fix quotes for "Blog preview" and "Fetch blog style" and
> "mail apps" below:
> Currently:
> In Blogilo, you can pre-
> view your published post
> by selecting the „Blog
> preview" tab and clicking
> on the „Fetch blog style"
> button. Shortly, you will [...]
>
> and:
> Its appeal among
> other „mail apps" is
> that you get a very
>
> Page 7: quotes on aren't:
> > Learning and playing aren‘t ...
>
> Page 9: *Battleship* has been renamed (trademark issues) to *Naval Battle*
> .
>
> Page 9: quotes on "you're" and "game's" in the box starting with "KDE Games
> are quick and easy to learn"
>
> Page 10: inset: games.kde.org should not be truncated across two lines
> (sorry if that repeats a comment from someone else..).
>
> Page 12: box: suggest placing KMyMoney and Skrooge in *bold *font to match
> normal procedure for program names.
>
> Page 12: inset: fix improper apostrophe: Words'
> > Words‘ side panels
>
> Page 17: capitalization: say "DigiKam" instead of "Digikam" to be
consistent with page 16.
Page 17: inset: proper quotes on "Only create image" and "Burn".
Page 18: fix BSD reference and match with page 30 inset: something like
Currently:
If you use Linux or Unix [BSD? ~i#], KDE has soft-
ware to provide your basic working environment.
Suggestion: "If you use Linux, FreeBSD, or Solaris, KDE has software to
provide your basic working environment. (KDE applications are also
available on Windows and Mac OS X.)"
Page18: suggest including reference to upcoming plasma mobile. Current
sentence:
"Additional Workspaces are in development."
Suggestion: "Additional Workspaces, such as Plasma Mobile, are in
development."
Page 19: fix quotes:
Inset - change "other widget's" to "other widgets' ", and fix ' on
"plasma's".
Text: fix quotes for "Newspaper", "Application" and "Applications".
Currently:
With the click of a button, you can choose between
two desktop views: the „Newspaper" and „Applica-
tion" layouts. The „Newspaper" view displays your
choice of widgets showing web pages, news feeds,
pictures, weather reports and more. The „Appli-
cations" view includes a launcher with commonly
used applications and a search box to find others.
Applications are launched full screen to make the
Page 20:
Tips and Tricks: remove comma "The technology behind plasma allows" not
"plasma, allows".
Para 1, Widgets Everywhere, fix quote on it's.
Box: "Unlock widgets" rather than „Unlock Widgets"
Page 21:
fix quotes in text, boxes, and side.
Page 21: Activities paragraph, insert "on": "or you need a different set of
widgets depending *on* what you are working on? "
Alternatively, consider this rephrasing of the sentence:
"or you need a different set of widgets for different work?"
Page 22: fix quotes on "virtual desktop".
Page 23: restructure sentence: " Quickly, a community grew around this
effort." to "A community soon grew around this effort."
Page 23: fix sentence in 2nd paragraph. Currently, ends with:
[...] user support, and, most importantly, KDE appreci-
ates and involves its users. All kinds of people are
involved--an 18-year-old student from India, a 32- [...]
Suggestion: "user support. Most importantly, KDE appreciates and involves
its users. All kinds of people participate -- [...]"
Page 24: suggest a heading before bullet list of Values.
Page 25: box on KDE e.V.: fix quotes.
Page 26: fix quotes in text.
Page 27: rename heading "What is in it for me?" to "What's in it for me?"
Page 27: don't truncate website link (jointhegame).
Page 32: change "applets" to "widgets" in first sentence for consistency.
"Plasmate is the dream tool for writing Plasma ap-
plets. "
Page 33: Change "KDE4 tutorials" to "KDE tutorials"
Page 34: suggest not truncating any text by that big box.
Page 35: fix apostrophes in box.
Page 36: fix apostrophe in world's.
Also, I'll repeat comments elsewhere that the screenshots could look better
- the content is fine, but somehow they don't look good in the PDF file..
maybe it's quality or non-ratio resizing?
Finall,y I don't know what's going on with the quotes/apostrophes - some of
them appear as commas, others are inverted from how they should be. I have
tried to identify specific page numbers to make that easier to fix.
Overall, I want to say, GREAT JOB. The booklet looks superb, and I'm really
impressed by the way Felix and Damien (and others, I know, but those two
names come to the top of my mind right now) have picked up the project.
It's really close now guys, keep proof-reading and working away at it.
Best,
Vivek
>
> On Fri, Jan 21, 2011 at 10:09 AM, Felix Michel <felix_michel@gmx.ch>wrote:
>
>>
>> - workspaces part
>> - link list
>> - typos
>>
>> I suggest that people tell me where they find typos (page number) and then
>> i
>> correct them. To copy paste from the google docs is not really a good
>> workflow
>> for me, because then i will create new typos in my opinion.
>>
>
>
>
>> Ps: same location as usual: www.tradukt.ch/kde_booklet_ver2.pdf
>>
>>
>>
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Part two of my corrections follows:<br><br><div class="gmail_quote">On Sun, Jan 23, \
2011 at 1:14 PM, Vivek Prakash <span dir="ltr"><<a \
href="mailto:vivek.ap@gmail.com">vivek.ap@gmail.com</a>></span> \
wrote:<br><blockquote class="gmail_quote" style="margin: 0pt 0pt 0pt 0.8ex; \
border-left: 1px solid rgb(204, 204, 204); padding-left: 1ex;"> Hi,<br><br>Here's \
a list of minor corrections I've identified. I'll keep reading through and \
provide more comments as I get the time, but I know you're up against a \
deadline.<br><br>Vivek<br><br><br>Page 2: inset - TODO before printing / \
finalizing:<br>
1. remove "YOUR NAME" (maybe replace with "and others") <br>2. \
Add credits for graphics, currently has no names.<br><br>Page 3: Improper quotes \
around "Quick Tweet":<br>>KDE micro-blogging application. It has a \
simple<br>
>„Quick Tweet"; with it, a click of a button is all you<br><br>Page 4: wording \
when talking about Blogilo: suggest replacing "top" with \
"best"<br>>The top is that it handles multiple blogs <br><br>
Page 4: mention Emails for Kontact introduction:<br>>Manage your life with \
Kontact. Keep track of your<br>> appointments, deadlines and vacations, \
manage<br>Suggestion (change in <b>bold</b>): <b>Read your emails, keep</b> track of \
your appointments, [...]<br>
<br>Page 4: inset - Improper quotes around "start" and \
"All":<br>>super key often has the<br>> ‚start‘ text on it, or \
a<br>and <br>> ticking the „All" check box.<br><br>Page 4: inset re: Kontact \
components: fix punctuation: replace . with , at end of first sentence.<br>
Currently:<br>Although you can<br>open the Kontact<br>components separa-<br>tely, \
e.g. for Mail, Ca-<br>lendar or Contacts.<br>They are tailored to<br>work well with \
each<br>other within Kontact.<br><br>Suggestion (change in <b>bold</b>): Although \
[...] or Contacts<b>, they</b> [...].<br>
<br><br>Page 5: Improper quotes on Let's and Kontact's: <br>> Let‘s take \
a look at some of them!<br><br>> Kontact‘s email component <br><br>> \
Kontact‘s Calendar <br><br>Page 6: quotes on 'torrent':<br>
> It is easy to create a ‚torrent‘ to<br><br>Page 6: inset - fix quotes \
for "Blog preview" and "Fetch blog style" and "mail \
apps" below:<br>Currently:<br>In Blogilo, you can pre-<br>view your published \
post<br>
by selecting the „Blog<br>preview" tab and clicking<br>on the „Fetch blog \
style"<br>button. Shortly, you will [...]<br><br>and:<br>Its appeal among<br>other \
„mail apps" is<br>that you get a very<br><br>Page 7: quotes on aren't:<br>
> Learning and playing aren‘t ...<br><br>Page 9: <b>Battleship</b> has been \
renamed (trademark issues) to <b>Naval Battle</b>.<br><br>Page 9: quotes on \
"you're" and "game's" in the box starting with "KDE \
Games are quick and easy to learn"<br>
<br>Page 10: inset: <a href="http://games.kde.org" target="_blank">games.kde.org</a> \
should not be truncated across two lines (sorry if that repeats a comment from \
someone else..).<br><br>Page 12: box: suggest placing KMyMoney and Skrooge in <b>bold \
</b>font to match normal procedure for program names.<br>
<br>Page 12: inset: fix improper apostrophe: Words'<br>> Words‘ side \
panels<br><br></blockquote><div>Page 17: capitalization: say "DigiKam" \
instead of "Digikam" to be consistent with page 16.<br> <br>Page 17: inset: \
proper quotes on "Only create image" and "Burn".<br><br>Page 18: \
fix BSD reference and match with page 30 inset: something like<br>Currently:<br>If \
you use Linux or Unix [BSD? ~i#], KDE has soft-<br> ware to provide your basic \
working environment.<br><br>Suggestion: "If you use Linux, FreeBSD, or Solaris, \
KDE has software to provide your basic working environment. (KDE applications are \
also available on Windows and Mac OS X.)"<br> <br>Page18: suggest including \
reference to upcoming plasma mobile. Current sentence:<br>"Additional \
Workspaces are in development."<br>Suggestion: "Additional Workspaces, such \
as Plasma Mobile, are in development."<br> <br>Page 19: fix quotes:<br>Inset - \
change "other widget's" to "other widgets' ", and fix \
' on "plasma's".<br>Text: fix quotes for "Newspaper", \
"Application" and "Applications". Currently:<br> <br>With the \
click of a button, you can choose between<br>two desktop views: the „Newspaper" and \
„Applica-<br>tion" layouts. The „Newspaper" view displays your<br>choice of \
widgets showing web pages, news feeds,<br>pictures, weather reports and more. The \
„Appli-<br> cations" view includes a launcher with commonly<br>used applications \
and a search box to find others.<br>Applications are launched full screen to make \
the<br><br>Page 20:<br>Tips and Tricks: remove comma "The technology behind \
plasma allows" not "plasma, allows".<br> <br>Para 1, Widgets \
Everywhere, fix quote on it's.<br><br>Box: "Unlock widgets" rather than \
„Unlock Widgets" <br><br>Page 21: <br>fix quotes in text, boxes, and \
side.<br><br>Page 21: Activities paragraph, insert "on": "or you need \
a different set of widgets depending <b>on</b> what you are working on? "<br> \
<br>Alternatively, consider this rephrasing of the sentence: <br>"or you need a \
different set of widgets for different work?"<br><br>Page 22: fix quotes on \
"virtual desktop".<br><br>Page 23: restructure sentence: " Quickly, a \
community grew around this effort." to "A community soon grew around this \
effort."<br> <br>Page 23: fix sentence in 2nd paragraph. Currently, ends \
with:<br>[...] user support, and, most importantly, KDE appreci-<br>ates and involves \
its users. All kinds of people are<br>involved--an 18-year-old student from India, a \
32- [...]<br> <br>Suggestion: "user support. Most importantly, KDE appreciates \
and involves its users. All kinds of people participate -- [...]"<br><br>Page \
24: suggest a heading before bullet list of Values.<br><br>Page 25: box on KDE e.V.: \
fix quotes.<br> <br>Page 26: fix quotes in text.<br><br>Page 27: rename heading \
"What is in it for me?" to "What's in it for me?" <br>Page \
27: don't truncate website link (jointhegame).<br><br>Page 32: change \
"applets" to "widgets" in first sentence for consistency.<br> \
"Plasmate is the dream tool for writing Plasma ap-<br>plets. "<br><br>Page \
33: Change "KDE4 tutorials" to "KDE tutorials" <br><br>Page 34: \
suggest not truncating any text by that big box.<br> <br>Page 35: fix apostrophes in \
box.<br><br>Page 36: fix apostrophe in world's.<br><br>Also, I'll repeat \
comments elsewhere that the screenshots could look better - the content is fine, but \
somehow they don't look good in the PDF file.. maybe it's quality or \
non-ratio resizing?<br> <br>Finall,y I don't know what's going on with the \
quotes/apostrophes - some of them appear as commas, others are inverted from how they \
should be. I have tried to identify specific page numbers to make that easier to \
fix.<br> <br>Overall, I want to say, GREAT JOB. The booklet looks superb, and \
I'm really impressed by the way Felix and Damien (and others, I know, but those \
two names come to the top of my mind right now) have picked up the project.<br> \
<br>It's really close now guys, keep proof-reading and working away at \
it.<br><br>Best,<br>Vivek<br> </div><blockquote class="gmail_quote" style="margin: \
0pt 0pt 0pt 0.8ex; border-left: 1px solid rgb(204, 204, 204); padding-left: 1ex;"> \
<br><div class="gmail_quote"><div class="im">On Fri, Jan 21, 2011 at 10:09 AM, Felix \
Michel <span dir="ltr"><<a href="mailto:felix_michel@gmx.ch" \
target="_blank">felix_michel@gmx.ch</a>></span> wrote:<br> <blockquote \
class="gmail_quote" style="margin: 0pt 0pt 0pt 0.8ex; border-left: 1px solid rgb(204, \
204, 204); padding-left: 1ex;"><br>
- workspaces part<br>
- link list<br>
- typos<br>
<br>
I suggest that people tell me where they find typos (page number) and then i<br>
correct them. To copy paste from the google docs is not really a good workflow<br>
for me, because then i will create new typos in my opinion.<br>
</blockquote><div><br> </div></div><blockquote class="gmail_quote" style="margin: \
0pt 0pt 0pt 0.8ex; border-left: 1px solid rgb(204, 204, 204); padding-left: 1ex;">Ps: \
same location as usual: <a href="http://www.tradukt.ch/kde_booklet_ver2.pdf" \
target="_blank">www.tradukt.ch/kde_booklet_ver2.pdf</a><br>
<br><br></blockquote></div>
</blockquote></div><br>
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