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List:       kde-promo
Subject:    Re: [kde-promo] rebranding, finalising KDE 4.3 announcement
From:       Jos Poortvliet <jospoortvliet () gmail ! com>
Date:       2009-08-02 15:07:44
Message-ID: 5847e5cf0908020807q237b23ejacb8068105cd5cff () mail ! gmail ! com
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On 8/2/09, Justin Kirby <justin@neomantra.org> wrote:
> Jos,
> 
> Looking pretty good...and the pictures/video really shows off how visually
> pleasing KDE has become :-)  A few notes - all grammar fixes and typo
> corrections except the first one:
> 
> 1) It looks like the left menu navigation has sunk clear to the bottom of
> the page for some reason instead of sitting in its usual spot.
> 
> 2) "The KDE community has *fixed over 10.000 bugs* and *implemented almost
> 2000 feature requests* in the last 6 months."
> 
> This is minor but you might want to add the period and make it 2.000 for
> consistency.
> 
> 3) "A *faster Systemsettings* introduces a *optional treeview *for the
> configuration and several improvements to settingsdialogs."
> 
> Grammar fix - should say "introduces an optional tree view" I think.  I'm
> sure about the a -> an...assuming there should be a space between tree and
> view.  Also, SystemSettings is missing the capital S in Settings here.
> You've got it capitalized in other places so I assume you'd want it done
> here as well.
> 
> 4) "The *KDE games* now use a similair *Egyptian-style theme" - *typo,
> should be spelled "similar"
> 
> 5) Same paragraph as the last one - "KMahjongg introduces 70 new
> user-submitted levels and an *new game*, KTron, has been introduced."
> Grammar fix, should say "and a new game" rather than "an".
> 
> 6) "the new bug report tool has already proven itself by the increased
> quality of bugreports." Need a space between "bug reports".
> 
> 7) "The platform currently offers a *dataengine* for plasma applets
> supporting aspects of Social Desktop."  You're saying "DataEngine" instead
> of "dataengine" everywhere else in the document.
> 
> Awesome job pulling all this together Jos!
> 
> Best Regards,
> Justin
> 
> On Sun, Aug 2, 2009 at 8:53 AM, Jos Poortvliet
> <jospoortvliet@gmail.com>wrote:
> 
> > On 8/2/09, Stuart Jarvis <stuart.jarvis@gmail.com> wrote:
> > > On Sunday 02 August 2009 00:54:37 Jos Poortvliet wrote:
> > > 
> > > > Could you please have a final look at the php file and see if there
> > > > are any spelling mistakes etc? It should be final now, or at least
> > > > very close to that.
> > > > 
> > > Looks good. Two (really minor) suggestions:
> > > 
> > > Under "Desktop Improves Performance And Usability", bullet starting "The
> > > Plasma desktop shell" I think "smoother" sounds more natural than "more
> > > smooth".
> > > 
> > > First paragraph under "Spread the Word and See What Happens" I would
> > suggest
> > > "create screencasts" or "create a screencast" rather than "create
> > > screencast".
> > > 
> > > Good job.
> > > Stu
> > 
> > Thanks. Good suggestions, I changed the wording for both cases.
> > 
> > Will you guys also review the screencast and the screenshots for issues?
> > 
> > grtz
> > Jos
> > 

All fixed. Thanks!

@albert: I dunno what the mail address would be...  kde-i18n-doc ?

I'll send an email there.
 
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