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Subject: Re: F20 Technical notes are available for Review Some Feedback
From: Leslie S Satenstein <lsatenstein () yahoo ! com>
Date: 2013-09-23 17:29:21
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I am glad you mentioned draft release notes. I have two comments which follow which I \
marked up with colored text or with italics, followed by a personnal comment.
Within
Abstract
This document lists all changed packages between Fedora 19 and Fedora 20. The \
packages are listed according to their RPM group. There is a complete index at the \
end to permit the reader to locate a specific package by name.
May I suggest the following words be inserted (red)
This document lists all changed packages between Fedora 19 and Fedora 20 as of the \
time of this posting. The packages are listed according to their RPM group. There is \
a complete index at the end of this document permit the reader to locate a specific
package by name.
1. Introduction
The Fedora Release Notes details the major changes in the latest version of Fedora.
My question
Should the sentence say
The Fedora Release Notes details the major changes between Fedora 19 and this latest \
version of Fedora.
My Conclusion
This set of release notes is a superbly organized composed set of presentation data. \
My congratulations to the group and to you Peter, for this really great structured \
document. I am nobody special, just a end-user who appreciates the effort that went \
into its writing, researching, organizing, proofing and presentation.
Regards
Leslie
Mr. Leslie Satenstein
An experienced Information Technology specialist.
Yesterday was a good day, today is a better day,
and tomorrow will be even better.lsatenstein@yahoo.com
alternative: leslie.satenstein@gmail.com
SENT FROM MY OPEN SOURCE LINUX SYSTEM.
> ________________________________
> From: Pete Travis <me@petetravis.com>
> To: For participants of the Documentation Project <docs@lists.fedoraproject.org>
> Sent: Sunday, September 22, 2013 7:43 PM
> Subject: F20 Technical notes are available for Review
>
>
> I've just published the draft Technical Notes for Fedora 20. The updated
> content should be available[1] within an hour or two, once the content
> is picked up by the proxies. Technical notes are a great place for beat
> writers to start, please take a look.
>
> [1]
> http://docs.fedoraproject.org/en-US/Fedora_Draft_Documentation/0.1/html/Technical_Notes/index.html
>
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<html><body><div style="color:#000; background-color:#fff; font-family:Courier New, \
courier, monaco, monospace, sans-serif;font-size:12pt">I am glad you mentioned draft \
release notes. I have two comments which follow which I marked up with colored text \
or with italics, followed by a personnal comment. <br><br> <br><br><div><div \
class="abstract"><h6>Within <br></h6><div class="para"> <div><div \
class="abstract"><h6>Abstract</h6><div class="para"> This document lists all changed \
packages between Fedora 19 and Fedora 20. The packages are listed according to their \
RPM group. There is a complete index at the end to permit the reader to locate a \
specific package by name.
</div></div></div></div></div></div><br><div><span><br></span></div><div \
style="color: rgb(0, 0, 0); font-size: 16px; font-family: Courier \
New,courier,monaco,monospace,sans-serif; background-color: transparent; font-style: \
normal;"><span><br></span></div><div style="color: rgb(0, 0, 0); font-size: 16px; \
font-family: Courier New,courier,monaco,monospace,sans-serif; background-color: \
transparent; font-style: normal;"><span>May I suggest the following words be inserted \
(red)</span></div><div style="color: rgb(0, 0, 0); font-size: 16px; font-family: \
Courier New,courier,monaco,monospace,sans-serif; background-color: transparent; \
font-style: normal;"><br><span></span></div><div><div class="abstract"><br><div \
class="para"> This document lists all changed packages between Fedora 19 and Fedora
20 <span style="color: rgb(255, 0, 0);">as of the time of this posting</span>. The \
packages are listed according to their RPM group. There is a complete index at the \
end <span style="color: rgb(191, 0, 95);">of this document</span> permit the reader \
to locate a specific package by name.<br><br><br><div \
class="titlepage"><div><div><h2 class="title" \
id="idm219164478992">1. Introduction</h2></div></div></div> The <em \
class="citetitle">Fedora Release Notes</em> details the <span \
class="emphasis"><em>major</em></span> changes in the latest version of \
Fedora.<br><br><span style="font-weight: bold;">My question<br></span><br>Should the \
sentence say<br><br>The <em class="citetitle">Fedora Release Notes</em> details the \
<span class="emphasis"><em>major</em></span> changes <span style="color: rgb(255, 0, \
127);">between Fedora 19 and </span>this latest version of \
Fedora.<br><br><br><br><span style="font-weight: bold;">My \
Conclusion</span><br><br>This set of release notes is a <span style="font-weight: \
bold;">superbly organized</span> composed set of presentation data. My \
congratulations to the group and to you Peter, for this really great structured \
document.<br>I am nobody special, just a end-user who appreciates the effort that \
went into its writing, researching, organizing, proofing and \
presentation.<br><br><br><br></div></div></div><div><div><div><div><div><div><div><span \
style="" lang="FR-CA">Regards</span> <div><b><font size="2"><br></font><font \
size="2"> Leslie</font><br></b></div> <div><font color="green"><b><font \
size="1">Mr. Leslie Satenstein</font><br></b></font><font style="color:rgb(191, 0, \
95);" size="1" color="green"><span style="font-weight:bold;">An experienced</span> \
Information Technology specialist.<br>Yesterday was a good day, today is a better \
day,<br>and tomorrow will be even better.</font></div><font size="1" \
color="green"><font size="2"><a rel="nofollow" target="_blank" \
href="mailto:lsatenstein@yahoo.com">lsatenstein@yahoo.com</a></font><br><font \
size="2">alternative: leslie.satenstein@gmail.com </font><br></font><font size="2" \
color="green"><b>SENT FROM MY OPEN SOURCE LINUX SYSTEM.</b><br></font><br><span \
style="" lang="FR-CA"></span></div></div></div></div></div></div></div><div><br><blockquote
style="border-left: 2px solid rgb(16, 16, 255); margin-left: 5px; margin-top: 5px; \
padding-left: 5px;"> <div style="font-family: Courier New, courier, monaco, \
monospace, sans-serif; font-size: 12pt;"> <div style="font-family: times new roman, \
new york, times, serif; font-size: 12pt;"> <div dir="ltr"> <hr size="1"> <font \
size="2" face="Arial"> <b><span style="font-weight:bold;">From:</span></b> Pete \
Travis <me@petetravis.com><br> <b><span style="font-weight: \
bold;">To:</span></b> For participants of the Documentation Project \
<docs@lists.fedoraproject.org> <br> <b><span style="font-weight: \
bold;">Sent:</span></b> Sunday, September 22, 2013 7:43 PM<br> <b><span \
style="font-weight: bold;">Subject:</span></b> F20 Technical notes are available for \
Review<br> </font> </div> <div class="y_msg_container"><br>I've just published the \
draft Technical Notes for Fedora 20. The updated<br>content should be available[1] \
within an hour or two, once the content<br>is picked up by the proxies. \
Technical notes are a great place for beat<br>writers to start, please take a \
look.<br><br>[1]<br><a \
href="http://docs.fedoraproject.org/en-US/Fedora_Draft_Documentation/0.1/html/Technical_Notes/index.html" \
target="_blank">http://docs.fedoraproject.org/en-US/Fedora_Draft_Documentation/0.1/html/Technical_Notes/index.html</a><br><br>-- \
<br>-- Pete Travis<br> - Fedora Docs Project Leader<br> - 'randomuser' on \
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